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"[21] Scene 34; the ‘tie’ scene… It’s really great and you’re right, the script definitely needs *something* at this point but we’re just not sure this is it. (a) If you’re going to have a scene with only two speaking parts, they can’t both be called George. The producer character’s pretty much a bit part – something else perhaps? Harry? Dave? (b) We’re not clear about motivations in this scene – does the producer character like these ‘Beatles’ or not? Seems a bit hot and cold tbh. (c) He’s laying into them and they just sit there and…take it? In the previous fifteen pages you’ve shown us this edgy band. Stealing instruments, beating up sailors, setting fire to cinemas. No audience is going to believe these guys just sit there get told off like a bunch of schoolboys. Finally (d) You’re not going to like this, but…we’re really not happy about the punchline. ‘I don’t like your tie’. What about something like 'So are you gonna make us stars then, Dave?’ Speak soon..."
